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        你的雅思大作文為何得不了高分

          曾有老師在課堂中做了一個作文評價活動,這其實是考官的一篇范文。許多學生在不知情的情況下,給雅思考官的作文評分并不高,大多給出了5.5或6的分數,更有甚者,給出了5分。這同筆者之前預料的相一致,國內學生作文分數不高,不僅是英文水平低的問題,其實還犯了議論文寫作方面的方向性錯誤,錯誤已經嚴重到分不清美丑的地步了。

          現在分析一下這篇文章

          Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

          開頭段:

          When they finish school, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university.    

          第一句:背景句,起引入話題作用。

          第二句:用讓步狀語從句改寫題目,在主句中表明了自己的觀點。并不是說用了while…I believe…之類議論文常用的詞匯就成了模板,這是議論文的常用表達法。

          主體第一段:

          The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons. Many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible. In this way, they can become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family. In terms of their career, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. This may lead to promotions and a successful career.

          第一句:本段的中心句,在議論文寫作中,一個段落只能有一個中心句,且段內的所有論述都是為證明中心句而服務的,不能與中心句產生沖突。本段采用的論證方法是"擺事實,講道理",這種論證方法是比較難的,在擺事實的時候,不能出現多余信息,就本文來講,每一句都要出現與"work straight after school" 相關的詞匯,且不能出現其他無關信息。有些烤鴨可能會問,你說的那些什么"擺事實,講道理"中學語文老師也講過,可我考的是雅思,不是語文。其實,不管是中文也好,英文也罷,只要文體是議論文,就得遵守議論文的寫作方式,英文和中文只是寫作語言而已,而"語言是思維的物質外殼",僅僅外殼不同,思維方式完全可以相同。

          主體第二段:

          On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies. Firstly, academic qualifications are required 東莞雅思培訓 in many professions. For example, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the relevant degree. As a result, university graduates have access to more and better job opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer qualifications. Secondly, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company. Young people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to compete.

          第一句:本段中心句。

          第二句:本段的第一個分論點。第三句:舉例論證。第四句:道理論證。至此第一個分論點結束。

          第五句:第二個分論點。第六句:對比論證。

          結尾段:

          For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies beyond school level.

          結論處沒有多余的信息,東莞雅思培訓是對之前已經證明過的觀點的總結。

          總之,雅思大作文就只有兩點:一、英文水平;二、議論文寫作水平。有些同學沉迷于大詞替換,錯誤的認為議論文寫出來有不認識字才叫好文章,可問題是,你的讀者是接受過大學教育英文母語使用者,你的那些大詞,對于他們來說,還能叫大詞嗎?況且,大詞還十用九錯,最終結果只能是寫出只能貽笑大方。還有,雅思考試中的詞匯是指與話題相關的詞匯,把important換成essential之類,是沒用的。在語言問題解決之后,評價一篇議論文就是論證水平的高下了。沒有議論文寫作的意識,導致了學生無法識別一篇議論文的好壞,錯將一篇考官范文,評成5分爛文。

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